mijobooks Chapter 144 Jin Ping Mei and Journey to the West
Chapter 144 Jin Ping Mei and Journey to the West
Chapter 144 Jin Ping Mei and Journey to the West
Zhu Ting nodded shyly, bit her lips and said, "Look." After speaking, she turned around and went back to the small office.
Du Fei thought it was interesting, took a sip of hot tea, and opened Miss Zhu Ting's manuscript...
At this time, Zhu Ting was in the small office, stretching her neck to look out from time to time, and found that Du Fei was reading her manuscript, her heart was beating for no reason, as if she was back when she was a child and waited for the teacher to grade the paper after the exam.
Section Chief Qian, who was sitting across from him, was still holding his copy of "Arsenal of Immortal Machines" with his glasses under the bridge of his nose. Seeing Zhu Ting's appearance, he casually said, "Girl, you recruited that kid Du Fei again?"
Zhu Ting was taken aback for a moment, then glared at Section Chief Qian and said, "What do you mean recruiting him! Old comrades, pay attention to your wording."
Section Chief Qian laughed and said, "Girl, do you mean that you have taken a fancy to our little Du?"
Zhu Ting immediately blushed: "Comrade Qian, what are you talking about!"
Section Chief Qian curled his lips and said deliberately: "Nothing is the best! Let me tell you, girl, a little boy like Xiao Du doesn't have any good intentions..."
"Comrade Qian! If you talk nonsense again, I will be angry." Zhu Ting tried her best to keep her face sullen, but the blush on her cheeks revealed that she obviously lacked confidence.
"Ai~" Qian Kechang sighed, imitating the accent of Beijing opera: "Oh~ loyal words are harsh~ ah!"
Zhu Ting glared at him again.
Outside, Du Fei glanced at several pages.
Should I say it or not, Zhu Ting's pen writing is really beautiful!The font structure has just been advanced, the strokes are sharp, and the charm is full.
In comparison, Du Fei's handwriting is much worse.
By the time of lunch break, Du Fei had already read more than half of Zhu Ting's novel.
As someone got up and walked out, he also raised his head and stretched himself.
Zhu Ting came out of the small office, leaned over and said, "Hey, what do you think?"
Du Fei nodded and said, "Sister Zhu, your hard pen calligraphy is really good!"
"Who asked you this..." Zhu Ting was stunned for a moment, and immediately realized, her beautiful red phoenix eyes widened, and she said angrily, "Speak well, don't be weird, my novels are really that bad? "
Du Fei comforted: "Actually, it's not that bad, at least the punctuation marks are used correctly."
Zhu Ting suddenly became furious, and her fists were clenched tightly, wishing she could go up and beat Du Fei up.
However, she still had to maintain her leadership image in the unit, but she still gritted her teeth and said, "Du Fei, you'd better explain it to me! What's wrong with my novel? Otherwise..."
Du Fei instantly felt a murderous aura, but his head was stiff, and he curled his lips and said: "You told me to say this, don't cry later."
Zhu Ting took a deep breath, resisting the urge to strangle Du Fei: "Say it!"
As a young literary woman who graduated from Yan University, this bastard in front of her actually questioned her literary dream!
Tolerable or unbearable!
Du Fei was not in a hurry to eat at all, so he said in a leisurely manner: "First of all, the hero, what kind of unlucky name is this? Zhan Taiming, why don't you just call it Zhan Taiming? Why do you choose such an uncommon compound name? In addition to increasing readers What's the use of my dyslexia? I have explained to people many times in the book that my surname is Zhantai, not Zhan, isn't it embarrassing?"
Zhu Ting flattened her mouth.
Du Fei said again: "And that murderer, why did he make such a low-level mistake as soon as he opened the board? It's not like an experienced enemy spy at all. Can the protagonist show how powerful the protagonist is by defeating this kind of enemy?"
Zhu Ting was a little speechless.
Du Fei continued: "Think of Professor Moriarty in Sherlock Holmes! Powerful, sinister, cunning, and vicious! That's the temperament that a big villain boss should have."
At this time, Zhu Ting's little fist could no longer be held, and she asked without confidence: "Is it really that bad?"
Seeing her pitiful appearance, Du Fei couldn't bear it, so he took the time to say: "Sister Zhu, be more confident, and remove that 'ma'."
Zhu Ting blinked her eyes before she realized: "You...you're mad at me!" As she spoke, she reached out to grab the notebook on Du Fei's desk.
Du Fei hurriedly pressed it down, and said with an apologetic smile: "Hey~ hey~ Sister Zhu calm down, you calm down!"
Zhu Ting took a step back, her face flushed instantly, and she didn't care about grabbing the notebook anymore, she pouted, stomped her feet, turned around and ran away.
Du Fei stretched out his hand to touch his elbow, and thought to himself: "Damn, it's really unfathomable!"
After thinking about it, he picked up the manuscript on the table and followed him out.
Du Fei took a few steps in the courtyard, caught up with Zhu Ting, and said with a smile, "Sister, why are you really angry?"
Zhu Ting's cheeks were still slightly red, and she glared at him. When she saw the manuscript, she stopped and stretched out her hand, "Give it back to me!"
Du Fei said: "Don't tell me! I haven't finished reading this yet!"
Zhu Ting hummed and said, "What else are you looking at, you've made them worthless."
Du Fei said: "Why is it worthless? The description of the scene is really good! From far to near, from near to far, there is a sense of imagery, and the rhetoric is quite gorgeous. It is worthy of being a top student of Yanda."
Zhu Ting lowered her eyelids with an expression of 'you're lying'.
Du Fei smiled and said, "Don't stand here, let's talk while walking."
After speaking, Zhu Ting didn't care whether she agreed or not, and walked forward on her own.
Zhu Ting stood awkwardly for a second, but followed.
Du Fei waited for her to come to the side, and stopped teasing her, and said seriously: "Sister Zhu, this is your first time writing a novel, right?"
Zhu Ting let out a "hmm".
"Actually, as a beginner, these problems in your novels are nothing." Du Fei went on to say, "If you can be admitted to Yanda University, your composition must be very good, and your poetry and prose should also be good. But novels are different from these. In the same way, the essence of a novel is to tell a story, as long as the story is told clearly and brilliantly, the words don’t need to be too fancy, and it can still become an excellent novel.”
Zhu Ting pouted and asked, "Then tell me, how can you tell the story well?"
Du Fei said succinctly: "If you want to be fascinating, you must have ups and downs."
"Ups and downs?" Zhu Ting frowned.
Du Fei paused, waiting for her to think for herself.
Zhu Ting thought for a while and said, "You mean the plot will have twists and turns?"
Du Fei nodded: "It's like in "Jin Ping Mei", when Ximen Qing marries Li Ping'er..."
"Bah~" Zhu Ting's cheeks turned red immediately, she raised her hand and slapped Du Fei's arm fiercely: "I don't want to learn well! Look at the idea."
Du Fei curled his lips, thinking that if you haven't read it, you know it's a broken book?
However, he also realized that he was a bit Meng Lang, and changed his words: "Then say that "Journey to the West" hits the bones three times, which is a typical ups and downs."
Zhu Ting was lost in thought.
Du Fei said: "Go back and take a good look at the Three Dozens of Bone Demons, change the plot of your novel according to that model, and see if it's much better."
Zhu Ting had listened and nodded silently.
(End of this chapter)